In the weekend I stayed at my friend's house Sebastian. When I got there we all sat down on the couch and watched t.v for a little bit. When night time came we played snakes and ladders in his room. He won the game of snakes and ladders then we went to bed.
In the morning we woke up and had some breakfast then we went up to my house and played on my brother’s skateboard. He showed us some moves on the the skateboard. It was cool when he did the moves he fell off the skateboard a couple of times.
Then we went to the school and played on the playground for the afternoon. Then we went to the beach and played but then we got sleepy and went back to my house. then I went to my room to pat my cat when I was finished patting my cat we went to my friends house and played on his ps3.
When night time came I went home and had some dinner and then I went into the lounge and and went on my netbook. Then I did the dishes then I played Canvas Rider and went to bed.
I got up the next morning got dressed and ha.d breakfast then went to school.
You did lots of things in the weekend and each big idea is in a new paragraph. I also see you worked hard on your spelling.
ReplyDeleteYou do need to check that you don't repeat yourself in your sentence beginnings, a lot of sentences begin with 'then'.
Wow Zyrin!! Just like Miss Garden said you did a lot of things in the weekend. You must of had an adventure. Maybe next time you could change things up a bit , like don't use then and went too many times. Also remember to check your work and proof read it before you publish.
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